来自《小镇疑云 第1季 第5集 第5集》
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Didn't think.我没想到 -
Thinking definitely helps, Olly.多想想是有好处的 奥利 -
Right. Structure.好了 文章结构 -
Fifth para should be the third.第五段应该放在第三段的位置 -
That's where you want the detail in his past.这段要详细描述他的过去 -
Then we move these two sentences to the top of the second para.然后把这两句提到第二段开头 -
And... make this the close. See?这句放在结尾 看到没 -
Yeah, it's brilliant.看到了 你真厉害 -
That is brilliant, it's loads better.太棒了 这样排版顺多了 -
It's good. It's got all the facts,写得不错 陈述了事实 -
asks questions,也提出了疑问 -
clear point of view, but nothing sensationalised.主旨清晰 又没有耸人听闻